Demon Dance||Review for Review

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Angry thoughts float about my head
as I lie down atop my bed.
I close my eyes, I take a chance
of sleeping through another demon dance.

Hours of stillness, in which I lie
while ghoulish things sing me horrid lullabies.
I'm scared, they cackle as I weep
but, finally, I drift to sleep

My slumber is less than restful
as the nightmares that plague me become direful.
The sun wakes as I do, yawning over the sky
while I rise from my demon dance and wipe scalding tears from my eyes.

Peer Review

What about this piece delighted, surprised, or moved you?

The title is so strikings, and I love the imagery of the first stanza, it immediately caught my attention. I love how I can imagine myself as the author here on.

What else would you like to know? Where might the writer deepen an idea or question? Would additional details invite you further into the writing?

Is this sleep paralysis, Anxiety, Insomnia? It's amazing how well you allow your poem to progress. I love the AABB format you use.

Reviewer Comments

It's beautiful, really, thank you for sharing. I look forward to your next work.