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Hi guys. I am working on my dialogue, so please tell me what you think about the pacing, readability, or any other tips. Thank you!
I think the way you presented the girl in the story was wholesome! It also piqued my interest as to what relationship the girl has to the guy. I find it funny how you introduced juxtaposed personalities/lifestyles into the same scene: A little girl who would probably want nothing more than to do a tea party and a man who has probably gotten himself into deep trouble. The irony of an easier life led by an innocent child vs. the very weird and seemingly dangerous life the main adult is leading, in my opinion, was a great choice and seems to add a deeper satirical meaning.
Who exactly is this man running from and where are the girls' parents? You did a wonderful job adding suspense and keeping the reader engaged! The pacing of the dialogue wasn't too fast and allowed me to fully understand the story while taking my time doing it.
Keep up the good work !