~Zoe N~

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toxic yet sweet

November 10, 2020

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pouring acetone over your colored nails, 
a sweet overpowering smell,
of sugar and fruit.
toxic lies hid beneath. 

layers, and layers
of fake skin to cover 
the hatred you hide 
under your nail polish,
and sweet perfumes. 

superficial and yet beautiful,
toxic and yet sweet,
truthful and yet you hide things

deep down
where no one can find them. 
deep down
where only you 
can see. 



 
To tell the truth, I have no idea what I just wrote....

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19 Comments
  • Rose A

    Wow, this is good! I'm literally going woah.
    And since we haven't met yet: Hi, I'm Rose!


    4 months ago
  • midnight.summerrose

    Re: I’m not allowed to give out my details, sorry but I’d be happy to just communicate on here though! :)


    4 months ago
  • midnight.summerrose

    Oh my days!! Another amazing piece of writing!! I don’t know how you are so good!! Everything is so perfect and beautiful!! :)


    4 months ago
  • Lata.B

    Bro this is so good!!! Like amazing!!!
    Re- You should!!!! It's so fun!! If you do, tell me!!


    4 months ago
  • em wilder

    i love this... so relatable. the metaphors especially. it's beautiful. and i get the trying to please or cleansing or imperfectness and false lies and just all of it. it's very deep and emotional. <3<3<3


    4 months ago
  • ???

    Woah. This is so... WOW


    5 months ago
  • Coolgirl2020 (LOVE YA ALL)

    BEAUTIFUL!
    Also, this is the link to my second draft in case you want to look at it! <3
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/194387/version/395909


    5 months ago
  • dream02

    Why is it that the fake people are called perfect. The ones who are the most imperfect.


    5 months ago
  • tas (yellowbrickrd)

    Re: Thank you so much for your kind comments ! Also this is amazing. :0


    5 months ago
  • abby.a

    woahhhhhhhhh.... wow... wowowow....


    5 months ago
  • lochnessie

    re: :)))


    5 months ago
  • buddingauthor

    Woah, you took an everyday activity and made it so deep and meaningful!! Its really beautiful!


    5 months ago
  • Rachaelgrace (hiatus) :)

    This is so good! Nice writing Zoe!


    5 months ago
  • Bhavya's Treasure

    You took such a mundane thing and strung it into a metaphor! Indeed the smell is so sugary and fruity but yet it's toxic. Wow!

    I think in the last line of first stanza it should be 'hidden beneath'
    Correct me if I'm wrong. :)


    5 months ago
  • waxingcrescents

    I love the inner conflict that drives this piece forwards. It has a gritty, raw tone that's so captivating. Your voice is so powerful here. Wow.


    5 months ago
  • V-Rose

    Re: Thanks for your awesome comment. I don't think I'll do a part two or book of Cat Fight yet but I'll let you know if I do. I'm already working on three stories. Maybe after I finish one or two of those.


    5 months ago
  • Rohan’s Defender

    Re: aww thanks!


    5 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Great use of an extended metaphor in this piece!


    5 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Re: <3


    5 months ago