mindfruit (semi-active)

United States

he/him | taiwanese-vietnamese
15
Catholic
basketballer and pianist
artist (sometimes)
community ambassador alum
Sanderson, McMann, and Messenger

est. July 7th, 2020

Message from Writer

Currently vibing to:
Donda by Kanye

A little busy with school and feeling under the weather currently, will try to pop in when I can!

Be sure to check out:
~Rohan's Defender (awesome writer and awesome person! should seriously consider becoming a motivational speaker)
~Anne Blackwood (my wtw mom, one of the finest poets on this site!)
~FantasyOtter12 (a daily source of laughter and good emotional feels!)

Say hi if we haven't met!
Say hi if we have met!

proud (title suggestions?)

October 18, 2020

FREE WRITING

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ah yes, the life of a teenager
wrapped in the silken sheets of adolescence
the soft cocoon before the graceful butterfly
dangling from but a single point
we brave the wind, the rain
waiting anxiously for the day
when we finally crawl out of our sanctuary
and sperad our wings

our place, we know not
our identity, we know not
old molds are broken, new ones are formed
we follow the masses, for we are afraid of being alone
we sit in solitude, for we are afraid of revealing ourselves to the world
there is no map to follow,
no "x" to mark the spot
and yet still we search
who am I?

gone are the carefree days of childhood
when it was never a question of if you belonged
we deny, we hurt, we cry
but through that pain we grow
the weeds in the pavement
ugly, yet together
and proud
Hope y'all enjoy, and have a wonderful day :)

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17 Comments
  • irisdi54

    Oh my god, I loved this! It conveys the feeling of being a teenager so perfectly; the line "we follow the masses, for we are afraid of being alone" literally took my breath away.

    I would love if you could take a look at my latest poem, A Legacy of Stories.


    10 months ago
  • Bertrand

    This is awesome...I like the transition in the poem!


    11 months ago
  • Anlee

    love how you described the cocoon metamorphosis because a lot of people and poets and writers only focus on the butterfly. "we" and "us" really created this feeling of unity that gave me goosebumps <3


    11 months ago
  • iamgroot

    Re: Yes! I would give my "death stare" is any of my friends and family ordered pizza with pineapple on it. And yes Hobi and Jimin are both my favourites.


    11 months ago
  • bookmagic

    Re: Honestly, Sokeefe is my favorite ship and Tiana is my next favorite. Unfortunately it doesn't seem like Sokeefe will be a thing for a while.


    11 months ago
  • Huba Huba

    I love this poem!


    11 months ago
  • beth r.

    i love this! i agree with isa, shedding is a good title.
    maybe shedding pride?
    re: thanks!!


    11 months ago
  • chasing sunsets

    I especially love "but through that pain we grow". All of it is soo good! And you perfectly captured that transition of from familiar to unknown. Great writing!!


    11 months ago
  • ~madeline~

    Wow!!! I love this sooo much!! I agree with F'Otter's favorite lines. Those were sooo beautiful. I was thinking a possible title could be "Metamorphasis" because the piece is highlighting a transition period... IDK. I like what you have already too though.


    11 months ago
  • Livsnjutare

    This so good!! Great job!
    :D


    11 months ago
  • FantasyOtter12

    omigosh I rly like this one "we deny, we hurt, we cry
    but through that pain we grow
    the weeds in the pavement
    ugly, yet together" <33


    11 months ago
  • olz

    Re: Wow this is so cool! Thank you for the tip and comment!


    11 months ago
  • Turkeycracker K (a.ka. Firecracker)

    Nice!
    Re: Thanks for commenting on my story! Yeah, once I had that idea, it was always stuck in my mind that he'd look like that in all my stories after a certain time period (yes, my brother and I made up a WHOLE TIMELINE for our stories). Then I realized that a lot of marvel characters lose their left arm somehow, and that if I hadn't come up with that idea, someone else probably would've.....In the story, Thor asks Star-Lord "What happened to YOU?" and Star-lord's like, "Hey at least we're twins now."


    11 months ago
  • Rohan’s Defender (Semi-Active)

    Wow, incredible writing! I love the ending!
    Re: thank you! Yes it was hard, but it’s turned into some very interesting writing at least. I’m thankful that I realized how it helped to write about it. An led everyone here has been so supportive of all my writing, it means so much to me. Thank you again! :) I also hope you have a great weekend! (Woohoo it’s Friday!!)


    11 months ago
  • queenie

    hmm..i'm seeing a theme of shedding innocence in this?
    so..a possible title could be "gone" or "shedding"?


    11 months ago
  • mirkat

    This is great! I love your metaphors. This is also so relatable for me.....


    11 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Re: Idk lol. I really love names and naming things, and for a while, that was a name I was just really stuck on (pretty sure Ethyn was my first fave for some reason). Ethyn got mildly ruined for me (I've met too many of them lol), but I still really like Connor. It's definitely one of my favorite common names (my faves are mostly in Hebrew). Okay I use parentheses too often haha.


    11 months ago