Dmoral

United States


est. 2018
she/her | poeian/pathian
obsessed classics enthusiast & linguist.
humanism + romanticism = writing inspiration

Message to Readers

since when did it feel so dull

alien autopsy.

September 25, 2020

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t h i s  i s  h o w  y o u  d i e d:
you moved your hands from the sky, pieces
of stars fell out and clung to the bottom of
your scratched palms; i’m convinced the
heavens must have glued them to you, while
you were dreaming of becoming more than
fate’s crafted you.

t h i s  i s  w h e n  i  s t u d i e d  y o u:
here i am, holding your bleedinggushingmoving
heart in my hand and i don’t know what to do
(i’m terrified, aren’t you?); but you won’t say a
word, ’cause cadavers are silent corpses, only speak
when spoken to. tell me, what if translations were
lies? how would we know what’s truly said when we
asked for help understanding it in the first place?;
i only ask ’cause poking through your soul and
scratching a scalpel against your chalk skin feels like
i need someone to decipher the secrets within.

t h i s  i s  w h a t  t o  d o  w i t h  y o u:
so should i pay for a land that’s not even ours
to sell to bury a foreign body no one will ever
want to come to? or do i stop paying the stealers
of earth’s land and send you back to the stars
where they’ll recycle you? all i know is the sun
melts you like a mundane thing (a popsicle it
seems) as it sneaks through the window panes,
it’s the moon that bathes your body like a queen.
lowercase intentional.
Finished: 9/20/2020
figured i crank out some new material before i officially begin homework, enjoy! (look at me posting at a time that isn't close to midnight! lol)

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4 Comments
  • Wisp

    You know, this is actually the piece that made me start binge reading your pieces. I'm not entirely sure why, but I remember being really passionate reading this and writing out a comment (yes, I wasn't intimidated anymore haha). Also, I think I already told you, but when I read over these old comments I wrote on your pieces, it's just embarrassing and I vaguely remember what I wrote on this one and I just feel too mortified to actually reread it.
    Anyways, I love how it focuses around this idea of an alien and perhaps their lover (?). Like I get this feel that even though the person is dissecting them and studying them and everything, they still find themselves enchanted by this alien and that they're keeping it a secret from everyone else. There's this hint of perhaps a love story, but it's not obvious and as the piece progresses and the picture is painted it just opens up with so many more questions.
    "so should i pay for a land that’s not even ours
    to sell to bury a foreign body no one will ever
    want to come to? or do i stop paying the stealers
    of earth’s land and send you back to the stars
    where they’ll recycle you?"
    So they're an alien and there's this sorta chemistry between the captor and them and it's like what's going to happen. Because it kinda feels like a love story maybe and that's just an interesting dynamic to me. You make this ambiance of almost romance but not really between a scientist and their specimen and it sounds odd, but it works beautifully. And it all comes together in a way that you wouldn't quite expect but still find it so very lovely.


    about 2 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    I'm just gonna leave this here
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/192967/version/391800


    5 months ago
  • Paisley Blue

    Okay there is literally NOTHING i can say that Wisp didn't already say... so just read her comment again...! Serious chills happening here. Wow. I love your writing so much!!!


    5 months ago
  • Wisp

    That title is a literal godsend. And your formatting, beautiful as ever. But let's talk about words here, since you know writing and all.
    "you were dreaming of becoming more than
    fate’s crafted you."
    "i only ask ’cause poking through your soul and
    scratching a scalpel against your chalk skin feels like
    i need someone to decipher the secrets within."
    "of earth’s land and send you back to the stars
    where they’ll recycle you? all i know is the sun"
    Mmmm, Dmoral, how can you write something so beautiful yet so disturbing? Okay, so let me explain that, because it sounds like a negative when it's actually a positive. I meant disturbing in that way of unsettlement, because you write this piece as if we were the dissectors of a foreign lover. Yet, your phrases are as exquisite as ever, and I'm almost moved to excuse that thought of us as coroners.
    Also, good luck with your homework! I just barely finished my AP World History and math homework myself.


    5 months ago