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What do you think?
You are better than me.
When you let me down,
and criticize on me.
You do it twice,
I ignore it thrice.
When I touch the skies,
and see tears in your eyes.
you might have thought,
your words hurt me,
But you are the one,
who is getting on her knee.

I absolutely appreciate when some one supports me, but i am literally allergic from criticism.

Peer Review

What about this piece delighted, surprised, or moved you?

It's a great emotional piece which moved me by the simplest ways. No complications. Just emotions.

What else would you like to know? Where might the writer deepen an idea or question? Would additional details invite you further into the writing?

There isn't much that I would add other then maybe capitalization and punctuation. After periods or beginning of lines, capitalization is nice.

Reviewer Comments

I loved this piece!