naomi ling

United States

est. 6/14/20

Message to Readers

cross-posted

(hello if anyone watches i-land....... chrys i'm looking at u.......... please hmu i would like to hyperventilate together)

not pointing fingers here, but if anyone sees some suspicious wtw profiles, it is probably suspicious. eat your radishes.

c-section of a doll

September 17, 2020

FREE WRITING

15
body contorts
into mannequin mosaics, folds taut
onto broken mattress springs as day bleeds
into night: broken record player spins
as melodramatically as the tides,
silver slit of moon dances
on bare shoulders shoulders
and should you breathe?
wind whistles over goosebumps, stifles
the loudest echoes / she screams
out with murdered teeth
that she is victim,
and only the thrum
of her heart gives response.

//

someone murmurs in the
throes of bitten tongue; she wraps
the world around her hips and
claws at the oceans: spinning, she hangs
suspended
in the midst of ebbing tide. jagged
lines around mouth and nose
bisect / suture fine threads against
flesh, fingers search for skin
that is untouched — there is
little beauty in what is left, only
body.
don't cry for what is gone. and the world goes on. 

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15 Comments
  • spurtsofdarkness

    also what's up with radishes? AND AND AND IT'S SO GOOD TO SEE YOU ON THE DASH AGAIN WE NEED GOOD FOOD ON THE DASH


    7 days ago
  • spurtsofdarkness

    OH MY GOD LMAO DID YOU JUST TROLL A GOD FAN QKJSAAJSJKSKSKKSS I CAN'T EVEN AAHHHH


    7 days ago
  • outoftheblue

    i think ur *raDish*Ing


    7 days ago
  • outoftheblue

    MMMMMM radishes


    7 days ago
  • sunny.v

    radishpocalypse baby


    7 days ago
  • BlueWolf476

    This is absolutely breathtaking!!! I just have no words. The word choice is stunning and the whole thing is captivating! Amazing job, just love it!!!


    7 days ago
  • Karen <3

    God would want you to at least capitalize His Bible Verses >:(


    7 days ago
  • naomi ling

    @Karen <3 hey hey, remember that only God can control how we feel -- we are blessed. fighting!! (Philippians 4:6)


    7 days ago
  • Karen <3

    Now you're being a meanie


    7 days ago
  • naomi ling

    @Karen <3 did i ask


    7 days ago
  • Karen <3

    I like your writing!! I think you should capitalize stuff though because this is bad grammar :(


    7 days ago
  • antizoeclub

    and !!! i have to comment again bc that last stanza just gets me right in the heart. the talent in this piece ugh jeez


    7 days ago
  • antizoeclub

    "she screams out with murdered teeth that she is victim, and only the thrum of her heart gives response", and "she wraps the world around her hips and claws at the oceans" this is so gorgeous and dramatic in all the right ways !!! i wish i could read this for the first time a million times..... whew i do not even have the words


    7 days ago
  • Eblinn

    This is stunning!! It has such a powerful flow to it and it's full of wonderful imagery.
    "silver slit of moon dances
    on bare shoulders shoulders
    and should you breathe?"
    Such an amazing choice of words throughout your whole piece!
    (Thanks for your encouraging comment btw :)


    7 days ago
  • lil_radish107

    AHA! This, my radish consumer associate, is nearly as good as the fantastic root veggies themselves! MANY KUDOS AND ROOT VEGGIES TO THEE pew pew lil radish zoom zoom AWAYYYYYY


    7 days ago