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short proses 'cause the one-liners on my notes app aren't corresponding
I loved it! Especially the line about forgetting the guys heart beat - the whole paragraph really about liking people for more than looks - I really loved that because it was such a small but intimate detail.
the fourth paragraph was a little hard to understand for me. I reread a couple ties, so I think I get it now and I really like the ideas in it, but I would look at rewriting it.
Overall, it's pretty freaking fantastic. Good job!!!