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I... I was just ignorant to the suffering of other people just on the other side of my country and the fear people must be going through.
...I'd kind of like to know what the city actually looks like in this piece. I'm not sure it could be done in a way that doesn't mess up the original poem, but maybe like an establishing shot outside a window at the beginning or just before the end.
I haven't watched the news in weeks I had no clue this was a thing (other than in "uh oh the volcano's acting up honey"). I, uh, I hope you're okay.