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Brandon Sanderson, Jennifer Nielson, Shannon Messenger, Patrick Rothfuss, Michael J. Sullivan

Joined 8-19-2020

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I'm trying again to write rhyming poetry... Not sure how happy I am with it. Let me know what you think!

Where Life Doesn't Cost

September 16, 2020

Where life doesn't cost happiness
Where love doesn't cost fear
Where sickness doesn't plague everyone
Where none shed a tear

When joy comes so easily
When hope isn't lost
When friends don't give up on me
When peace doesn't cost

Where there is equality
Where no one is judged
Where someone will set me free
Where all will be loved

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6 Comments
  • Landofstories

    Girl, wow! It's great but it rhymes and that makes it all the more amazing!


    14 days ago
  • BlueWolf476

    I think the rhymes are soooooooo good. I love how every line flows, makes sense and looks like it belongs there. Like you just wrote the poem and your subconscious magically made it rhyme. In a fantastic way because the poem flows so nicely and there aren't any lines that are there to fill the space and are irrelevant to the poem. (I struggle with the flow of my poems and keeping them on topic but rhyming.) It is amazing and I think the message is so relevant. (I don't know if I made sense. Sorry)


    14 days ago
  • Sanjana Sunilkumar

    This is so good!


    14 days ago
  • Hanbanhandstand

    I was smiling the whole time I was reading this. Amazing job!!!


    18 days ago
  • acrosstheuniverse28

    This really resonated with me and what I've felt about the world recently. Beautiful writing!
    Re: Thank you so much for your feedback! That's a really important point I never considered. Thanks!


    19 days ago
  • mindfruit

    Oh gosh, great poetry. AND IT RHYMES TOO. The message behind this piece is simple but powerful. Love it!


    19 days ago