Ibex

United States

Christian
as in Presbyterian Church in America
(denomination)
Writer
Novelist
Reader
Ambivert or something
Self-proclaimed band nerd
Planet Earth nerd
etc, etc
Joined September 10, 2019

Message from Writer

Favorite songs (hymns edition):
--Rock of Ages
--It is Well With my Soul
--Be Still My Soul
--Come Thou Fount of Every Blessing
--Be Thou My Vision
Go read all the lyrics, I dare you.

------
Sometimes I tell stories. Most of the time I rattle my soul until I break and my heart spills out onto the page.

I tell stories not because I want to find God, but because He's already found me.
I don't think I'll ever really understand.

riptide

September 11, 2020

FREE WRITING

15
i had a girl once. pretty, with cinnamon eyes and freckles, hair that flew sleek like gull’s feathers in the wind. we walked hand-in-hand along the seashore and talked about getting married, buying a house on the ocean and swimming in the waves, raising a family here and taking pictures of tiny footprints in the sand.

she always did love the sea. it called to her, whispering of hidden cities and lost treasures, clamshells and silvery fish scales whirling into schools, sparkling like diamonds. she’d pick through the driftwood after summer storms, searching for seaweed and shark eggs.

there was a far-off look in her eyes that day, the day she told me i couldn’t give the world to her even though i’d always promised it. diamonds weren’t enough for her; she wanted pearls and rubies and gemstones only to be found in the deepest, darkest trenches of the world’s oceans. she wanted to swim, to be one of the fishes.

she never said goodbye. she merely smiled sadly at me and ran into the waves, diving beneath the crest and flying out of sight. i should have wrapped kelp around her waist like sea otters do their pups, to anchor her. but she was wild and full of unbridled wanderlust, dreaming of the big blue and all it could offer her. the sirens called to her from across the sea, their voices wily and dripping with impossible promises, and she was too enraptured to resist, disappearing beneath the foam. i called her name, but she never looked back.

Print

See History
  • September 11, 2020 - 7:17am (Now Viewing)

Login or Signup to provide a comment.

12 Comments
  • Anne Blackwood

    Have you heard the song How Can It Be by Lauren Daigle? It's so good I think you'd really like it.


    3 months ago
  • sci-Fi

    A perfect balance of beautiful, adorable, and heartbreaking


    3 months ago
  • RemovedUser1

    This is so beautifully sad. I can feel it. I don’t know how you feel writing but I do. And the emotion here is subdued yet so strong. Love the imagery as well. Great piece, yet so terrible. (Also, I think FOtter just cheered all of us up XD)


    3 months ago
  • Paisley Blue

    Basically just read what everyone else is saying—i totally agree with them! This is am amazing piece!!! Wow... <3


    3 months ago
  • madeline3.14159

    WOW. I don't know what to say that hasn't already been said. So let me reiterate. ABSOLUTELY OUTSTANDING!!! Love it!


    3 months ago
  • Rohan’s Defender

    Aww, this is so sad, sweet, poetic, beautiful, and heartbreaking at the same time. AND YOUR IMAGERY IS PHENOMENAL!!! Wow! Hi, I’m Eden! Nice to meet you!


    3 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Lol I love how FOtter (just made that up rn) is losing his mind over your line about otters haha


    3 months ago
  • Stone of Jade

    oh this is so heartbreaking but so so poetic and becomes even more beautiful as you keep reading. This is stunning!! Your wording *deep sigh of contentment* so poetic!! I can picture your imagery so vividly. I can't even describe how stunning this is.


    3 months ago
  • amazing grace

    Is there any way I can pray for you?


    3 months ago
  • FantasyOtter12

    omgomgomg "i should have wrapped kelp around her waist like sea otters do their pups, to anchor her." This is probably my FAVORITE line i've ever read on wtw, both coz I resonate with it and...well...otters :P


    3 months ago
  • Bhavya's Treasure

    Ahhh! Your descriptions are impeccable! I wish she'd not been so wild! T-T
    Lowercase is doing wonders here. Great job!
    Title is so well chosen.


    3 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Aww, this so bittersweetly lovely


    3 months ago