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Overall, I think the write does a good job showing the reader that time period. She mainly does this in small details such as the dads view points on women’s rights. Although, I would have liked to see a little more. I would recommend looking up information about the time period itself for this, and add information as details about maybe a popular food, item of clothing, or tradition of the late 1840s.
The main character is troubled by the suppression she and other females of the time faced due to their gender. She has a misogynistic dad that does not see her as an intelligent young adult. Id love to she the writer dive a little deeper into how this struggle in born in the roots of her passion for this cause. Was her mother treated poorly by her father before she became ill or even during? Has her future aspirations been denied because of her gender?
I ask that you look through the highlighted regions of text, for I add a lot of information for this question with in that. In addition, I think you do extremely well with having a purpose in everything you do in this piece. I think everything connects wonderful, but I would have like you to take a moment every once and a while in the piece to really let the reader get to know this character on a deeper level. How was her upbringing? How did this effect her view point later on in life?
I know you have a great piece already. You have a good foundation, so now all that’s left is to make the piece phenomenal. There may be times when you get stuck, and if so feel free to reach out to me. I’d love to help.
Don’t forget these are just suggestions that I think could help the piece get to the next level, but I’m not an expert. You should be super proud of the piece you have created so far. Please let me know when you post your updated version. I can’t wait to read it! also, i personally like the title you have already created. :)