Paisley Blue

United States

she/they | minnesotan
INFP-T, lesbian, christian
--
est. June 2, 2020

absolutely in love with words
theater geek and musician
trying to spread kindness and love and all that jazz <3

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Message to Readers

i've been listening to this song a lot lately, and i am in love with the images that are conveyed. so i thought i'd write about it! hope you like this... it's definitely different than what i'd usually do, but i think i like it! feedback is welcome and appreciated! happy writing <3

a broken hallelujah

September 7, 2020

FREE WRITING

14
i.
hit play/one chord after another
you are music/twisting/surrounding me
with your/haunting melody
this/this is something different
you are no ordinary
song
you don't care/you never have
but i can't get your notes
out of my/head

hallelujah/hallelujah

ii.
your hair was wet
your skin shone in the/moonlight
or maybe/it was the moonlight
when you calmly watched me
break/down
you immobilize me/with only
words
how does your touch/leave me/trying
to pick up the pieces?
from my dying lips/you draw
breath after 
shuttering/breath

hallelujah/hallelujah

iii.
you smell of/déjà vu
i've seen this all before
i remember these/walls/you were always the one who pointed them out
and i only felt trapped when you were here
you told me/they kept me safe
but safe isn't
thirsting/for a life of
before/you
you descended and/broke my will
you flew your flag and/signed your name
and paraded my heart on your/spear
can this be/love?

hallelujah/hallelujah

iv.
and i collapse and/pray
because maybe/someone will hear
my cries of protest
this is not love
you are not love

but they are lost/to the night
i crawl towards freedom
with my eyes on the light
before you/slam the door/and
trap me inside the/dark
this isn't love
all i can do is protest as you/tighten your grip

hallelujah/hallelujah
hallelujah/hallelujah

hallelujah
inspired (and based on) the song Hallelujah, written by Leonard Cohen :)

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15 Comments
  • abby.a

    ok so confession, this song used to make me cry when i was younger. i don't know why, but it did. and the fact of you using lyrics from the original song made me so very emotional. beautiful. <3


    3 months ago
  • HelpMe512

    Replying: thank you for listening <3 as for whats going on, my parents are trying to support me transitioning but i can tell ive let them down. I dont want to cause them anymore pain yknow


    3 months ago
  • HelpMe512

    Replying: Hey thanks for your comment. I might as well take you up on your offer to talk bc i need it. Im going through a lot and cant handle it well. It kinda makes me want to just give up, so yeah.


    3 months ago
  • ek503

    ahh this definitely did the theme of the song justice. love love this :)


    3 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Replying: Thank you <3


    3 months ago
  • Karma's_Coming

    Replying: Thank you so much for all the kind words, it really means a lot. Have a wonderful day <3


    3 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Replying: Thank you!! <3


    3 months ago
  • amazing grace

    Reply: what piece do you want reviewed?


    3 months ago
  • Doodleninja

    Oh and also: New Stereo Tropes Co. story is here!!!!!!!!!!!


    3 months ago
  • Doodleninja

    beautiful take on the song! I love how you really drove in the theme of love-turned-stale :)


    3 months ago
  • lochnessie

    replying: aw thanks!!


    3 months ago
  • HelpMe512

    Replying: awww your comment just made my day! :D


    3 months ago
  • Abrianna

    oh cool. this is very good, my sister always loved Hallelujah by Cohen. i love your version its great.:)


    3 months ago
  • chrysanthemums&ink

    a wonderful companion to a lovely song. love how the overall mood and vibe is just perfectly portrayed through this piece.


    3 months ago
  • RemovedUser1

    Wow! I don’t think I’ve ever actually listened to these lyrics, but this is beautiful!


    3 months ago