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I...... honestly have got no clue what this is. But I threw some words together and I like a couple of the lines so.... tell me what y'all think :)
I do really want to improve this and give it some bigger meaning, so any/all feedback is greatly appreciated!
the title <3 personally, i would've written it to communicate the sorrow i would feel. no matter what, it's an extremely eye-catching title, simply gorgeous
could you communicate the feelings of the writer more clearly? everything is beautiful, but when you have to nurture your lines, let it mature with the piece.
you're doing great, this work has such wonderful potential. be confident in your work, this is all constructive criticism.