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I really loved that image of her being pulled into the sky by the handle of an umbrella. What an imaginative way to depict death! This was a heavy story about cult indoctrination, but it was oddly peaceful, too.
I'd like some hints as to why and how she ended up in this position in the first place. You say her lips are swollen, and she seems a little tired, but we don't know why.
I really like this! Please keep writing. I hope my feedback was helpful and I'd love to read your next draft if you write one :)