Pravartika Wankhede

India

16-a lot on my mind

Message to Readers

over these last few weeks my illnesses relapsed and it is only vivaldi who protects me- that arrogant arse. this is my tribute to him- a form of thanks. show a LOT of love and check out outoftheblue's advice for newbies.
always yours,
Pravartika

Yours Truly, Vivaldi

September 3, 2020

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vivaldi/spring
words linked by white gold chains delicately throttling them together
like i throttle sweaty and tired coca cola bottles/
late in the morning of sluggish summer

a pianists' fingers/ the one thing my musician and i portion/
isn't it lovely all alone- all for one, two for none
lurking below veiny thin wrists/
alone in angsty angry fists 

all my love for you and the tension on our strings
snip 
snip snip

and then-weightlessness
i offer half blown blushing roses as a sacrament
generously dainty even in death 

vivaldi, saver of myself from me/ vivaldi of venice verily vehemently vain/
vivaldi guard me this one last day/
waves of insanity rush like office-hamsters on spins
cartwheeling and shaking their drenched-not droused-locks today.

hold out moses' staff/part the red sea/
make way make way
 

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9 Comments
  • BizzleWrites

    Relying to your comment on my piece: Thank you for that comment. I didn't really know what to write for it, as as said in my piece . . . I don't even follow sports. But I'm really glad someone liked it. Being forced to play tennis doesn't sound fun at all.


    3 months ago
  • inanutshell

    damn this piece is so great. "vivaldi, saver of myself from me/ vivaldi of venice verily vehemently vain/
    vivaldi guard me this one last day/
    waves of insanity rush like office-hamsters on spins
    cartwheeling and shaking their drenched-not droused-locks today." love that entire stanza, but especially the imagery in that last two lines. simply astounding.

    also i'm very uncultured idk classical music at all but i'm glad it's helped you! wishing you all the best w/ your health <3


    3 months ago
  • ek503

    woah. this is breathtaking!
    "isn't it lovely all alone- all for one, two for none lurking below veiny thin wrists"
    "vivaldi, saver of myself from me/ vivaldi of venice verily vehemently vain"
    vivid value indeed (ok that sounded better in my head, but the alliteration took too much effort for my tired brain to do so im not about to let it go to waste :p)


    3 months ago
  • waxingcrescents

    This piece. Is. Incredible!! The way you scattered alliteration, subtle rhymes, and imagery throughout was so beautiful and well done. Phenomenal work!


    3 months ago
  • Stumbling Conundrum

    "delicately throttling them together"
    A masterpiece!


    3 months ago
  • dovetrees

    this is AMAZING!! i love every single part of this, classical music is truly extraordinary at helping us all feel better imo


    3 months ago
  • spurtsofdarkness

    gorgeous* (also @outoftheblue you beat me ugh)


    3 months ago
  • spurtsofdarkness

    vivaldi really do be the og and i'm so glad someone knows him other than me. when i first became familiar with him, i obsessed over four seasons for days on end aksksksksks also this piece is EVERYTHING! the last paragraph killed me upon impact, and also these- 'a pianists' fingers/ the one thing my musician and i portion/
    isn't it lovely all alone- all for one, two for none
    lurking below veiny thin wrists/
    alone in angsty angry fists '
    well done, this is grogeous uwu


    3 months ago
  • outoftheblue

    DANGGGG

    also- SUMMER BY VIVALDI SUMMER BY VIVALDI SUMMER BY VIVALDI


    3 months ago