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What the heck is this?
UPDATE 11/21/20: This is an older piece I'm republishing since I plan on entering it into the Scholastics. Please give me constructive feedback in reviews and/or comments. Thank you!
Also: Do you think they would disqualify this due to it containing my first name? They don't allow identifying information to be in the piece, but I wasn't sure if this would count or not.
I love how you perfectly described your feelings.For example,the 3rd stanza and the first line in the last stanza.It's truly unbelievable.I feel like there isn't more to say,like I can't put it into words.Just the way you write about yourself and are able to explain yourself.This whole piece is beautiful.I feel like already said a bit in the highlights!
Just where I told you.Maybe adding more imagery where you want to explain how something felt or how you do things.It makes the reader feel so much more with you,because sometimes it can be hard to imagine.Also some words that you added (which I highlighted,just took a bit away from the line so just watch out for that.
I love this piece so much! I hope this review was somewhat useful.I wasn't trying to be rude!Please go through my critisisms and make up your own mind because this is just what I think.And you have much more experience so I really don't want to make this piece worse/give bad advice.Anyways Goodluck! You will do well either way! If you want to ask me anything,you're welcome to.<3<3