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Message to Readers
I apoligize for not publishing any work, I've been working on this chapter. This chapter may not be as interesting, but as the book goes on it gets juicy! This is a romance book and is going to be part of a series. Have fun reading! Comment below if you enjoyed or things maybe to change or predictions!!! P.S if you give me a shoutout or invite someone to check out this story, comment that and how many times or people and I will do the same for you. We are all writers who should support one another!
I think this story can go in many directions, and I'm excited to see where you're going to take it. I love the characters, and you gave them all such great and distinct personalities.
I highlighted most things, but you do really need to split up your dialogue into separate paragraphs. It makes it so much less confusing. You also should specify who's talking more often. One last thing, your words are a little bland. You use very common verbs and adjectives, so to make it more interesting, maybe use a thesaurus every so often to make your writing have more spice.
Super good start, and I'd love to read more