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So I know I've already republished this a few times, and I appreciate the likes it has gotten so far, but I'm curious as to why nobody has commented anything. This probably sounds needy and self-absorbed, but is there a reason there are no comments? This is one of the most vulnerable poems I've written and published, so I'd definitely appreciate feedback. If this poem was insensitive to anyone in any way, I'd really like to know. Thanks!
EVERYTHING surprised me and moved me. I won't say I was delighted. It's sad that even today black people aren't allowed to hold their heads high everywhere, but I'm proud that they do. I am proud of my sisters and my brothers. I am proud of my friends and my family. The uncanny resemblance of the germ of indifference and the actual virus envelopes me still, as I write this. Awesome work on this piece- your writing style is passionate and strong. It's touching, it's sad, and it's a call to action.
How will you take the "journey towards being cured?" What's your motive and your method? Maybe include it in your footnotes? I would really like to know the story after the world realizes they've been doing it all wrong.
Writing must inspire people...you've done just that. Today you've inspired me and definitely others who have read this piece. Congratulations! Let's take action.