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The first sentence. I loved the simile of a bird trying to escape it's cage describing the character's pounding heart.
"all the reasons to leave came flooding in..." This is great! You told us that the character is in some kind of social situation that they're panicking about without saying that directly. Great job!
No, you gave the perfect amount of information. Nicely done!
I absolutely adore great descriptions, which is why I loved reading your story. You had FANTASTIC descriptions and similes, I emphasized with your character from beginning to end. Keep writing, and I wish you the best luck in the competition!
One note: I think a stronger title for your story might just be "Panic". All my other thoughts are highlighted! Again, you wrote an amazing story, you should be so proud of yourself. Please leave a comment if you have any questions! :)