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Omg, I'm a little scared to submit it to be honest But I look forward to reading all your feedback!
“The bathroom floor of the 7-11” along with the description after and I just knew this story was going to be good.
Maybe try adding a bit more context, I was kind of confused on exactly what happened and why she was there but I still liked the bit of mystery it had.
I’d like to know more about her disheveled state and why they’d want to see it plus things I mentioned in the previous question :)
It’s a great story and your word choice is beautiful, but with just a bit more context it’d be awesome!
Keep up the great work :)