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The way you pair words together and make metaphors/Smilies sounds so formal and professional. Where you placed commas and Semi-colons added to the emphasis and the emotion. The font you chose was perfect, It's beautiful but imperfect in a way (Which reminds me of fire, Something heat-related)
Why is this personal to you? You've said in your footnotes that you've experienced a heatwave, Was this based on your experience? Some of your lines have two points in them, Maybe hit return whenever you hit a comma. Is there anything you can delete to make it more concise and shorter? Or what makes each line important to you?
All of my feedback is my opinion, Take it or leave it, Do what works for you and your piece. I have never experienced a heatwave so I'm not sure what your emotion was behind it Because I've never been through it. Is there a way to make the reader experience a heatwave in their own way, Even if they've never been through it?