Heart pounding, the woman ascended the abrasive rocks yearning to reach the top. Her desire to be one with the water was immense, but the rocks were as close as she could ever get. Gripping the eroding outcrop, she heaved herself up. Now…she stood atop the world. Nevertheless, she couldn't help but admire the young girl trapped beneath the ocean's surface. Inching closer to the edge, her urge to join the turbulence developed. There, the girl dared her to jump. Thus she leapt fearlessly, striking the water, and allowing herself to follow the damsel to her seafloor Shangri-La.
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