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idk what this is ok, y’all are just gonna have to pretend it makes sense
First off, I love the diction in this piece! Every line has a seemingly effortless flow to it, and I can sense the emotion. "let the sorrow hollow my bones out in this hypnosis of the heart" was perhaps my favorite line, as it was so striking and it perfectly illustrated what you brought up in your footnotes: a co-dependent relationship. I also love how you separated this piece into two "mini-poems" -- I think it really enhanced the two different themes here that are summed up in your title (ie: holding on and letting go). I've read poems about these two topics on numerous occasions, but I don't believe I've read a piece that brings up both of these ideas and ties them together. I think that your last line was an excellent ending, too; it really made everything come full-circle and was so intense and emotional, rendering me speechless. Phenomenal job!
In order to add to the emotion that is vividly displayed here, perhaps you could think about what impact it might have on your piece if you decided to add some dialogue between the two characters in this relationship? Or perhaps you could dive into one "scene" in their lives, really showing the co-dependency? Ultimately, what type of effect do you think it could create on your piece if you added tangible details that are specific to this couple and really gave them a "story." Maybe you could add another stanza here, or perhaps you could add it into the stanzas you already have: it's up to you. However, feel no need to take this suggestion, it's just a thought. :)
Overall, this was a really fun piece to read and review! If you have any questions, feel free to let me know, and in the meantime, keep writing! :)