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Message to Readers
The great Mughal emperor Jehangir, died with Kashmir on his lips; he could only visit the Paradise on Earth when he was taken to be buried there. Kashmir, the Paradise Valley now shrouded saffron, breaks my heart. Their people will fight till they are all dead, or till they are free. Indian atrocities in Kashmir must stop NOW. Please, please, please raise your voices and let there be international pressure from all of us. Let Kashmir finally be free of torture. Let Kashmir be free
Love and light,
What surprised and moved me about this piece was the overall poetically powerful call to action theme of it. Saffronisation, from what I'm reading, is a terrible atrocity where innocent mothers lose their children based on racial and religious prejudice. People need to do something about it or it will get worse. Also, your choice of words such as "shame", "black with pain" "snatched", and "stagnation", were rattling to the bone.
Aside from the reasons mentioned in the foot note, what other reasons did you have for writing this piece? Is this based on a personal experience? Something you've seen on television? Or based on something else entirely? How did you feel while writing this? Passionate? Sad? Angry? Creative? Proud?
Hello Pravartika, it's your friendly neighborhood Senior Peer Reviewer and I very much enjoyed reviewing your piece here. I found it to be enlightening and deeply moving, especially now with what's going on in the world nowadays. While there are some things in need of improvement, it's still really good and I fully encourage you to keep writing! On a minor personal note, I think you have a beautiful name; Pravartika means "one who inspires" and that's exactly what you're doing here as a writer here on Write The World.com. Nice work!