sunny_sky

United States

Hi! I'm a 14-year-old girl that aspires to be an author one day! I'm not too confident in my writing yet, but I'll try to get better! What I'm probably doing right now is either sleeping or listening to music, away from people.

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Any feedback is greatly appreciated!

Victor's Mother

August 7, 2020

One pleasant Tuesday morning, Victor went out with his mother.

He sensed the warm sunshine on his eyelids; the crisp morning air; and the warmth of his mother's hand. Victor loved his mother dearly, for she was everything to him.
Everything
"Wait here, my dear," she uttered.
And she let go of his hand, and Victor patiently waited, missing the warmth of his mother's grasp.

What Victor didn't know was that his mother was gone. She left him, and Victor didn't know, solely because Victor couldn't see. 
I'm really struggling! This is horrible writing. My vocabulary isn't the best, nor are my descriptions, so help is needed! I don't like my title either, so feedback is appreciated! Thank you!!!

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2 Comments
  • Ren

    I personally really liked this! I love how you mentioned his mother was everything to him and then his mother just left him, it's kinda ironic.


    6 months ago
  • Paisley Blue

    Review is on the way! :)


    6 months ago