naomi ling

United States

she/her
est. 6/14/20

Message to Readers

REVISED LYRICS CREDITS to RM, August Rigo, Vince Nantes, Clyde Kelly and Pdogg. "Black Swan" by BTS (2020)

black / swan (thank you for 100!!)

August 6, 2020

FREE WRITING

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[the heart no longer races 
when hearing the music play]

seven
are the swans that scrape the guttural chambers of my throat
with mandolin strings, brittle and barely broken / -- / 
stuff your sins with a cork, paper on lit grease and confession
on lips. 

this silence stifles me until i breathe asphyxiation 
and alcoholics / alchemy / amnesia / -- /
i think, therefore i am, but perhaps this bitterness 
is collateral. perhaps i still speak in 
song.

[seems like time has stopped --
oh, that would be my first death]

there is no coincidence in creation: spin the globe
in your fingers, tell me how the oceans
still thrum like heartstrings without
guide and how i am still drawn to

wax and wane of the melody. 
euphoria lasts a heartbeat: the music
in conscience is saccharine in nature, 
and so i devour.

[if this can no longer resonate
no longer make my heart vibrate]

flightless birds tell a tale of nine lives 
over wingspan and mythological wishes: 
a musician’s most bitter death passes after the last 
note. 
the hourglass teeters, sand decays under 
rasping fingernails.


[then this may be how
i die my first death]

seven 
are the consciences that draw me into
exhalation. my throat aches for 
salvation in the chokehold that is 
melody / vocal chords are held by strings / 
stage center, it ends with 
tacet. 
lyrics in italics credited to BigHit Entertainment

oh. wow. i think this might one of my longest pieces but after hearing the masterpiece that is this song i just had to 
(yes i'm a stan anyone else AAAH) 

thank you thank you for 100!! god forgive my hiatus on wtw.... i've missed this platform too much and seeing your works are the highlight of my day so i had to return and just in time <3 <3 

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17 Comments
  • jun lei

    hi hi i'm rereading this because you know, your poetry's so fucking gorgeous and i simply cannot--
    i also need to know who your bias is.


    about 2 months ago
  • outoftheblue

    NAOMI THIS IS GORGEOUS AND I KNOW YOU'RE OLDER THAN ME BUT I FEEL LIKE A PROUD MOM RN


    4 months ago
  • happy butterfly

    im so happy you're back,ive missed yoouuuuu
    such a lovely piece.and congrats on 100 followers!!! you deserve it<3


    4 months ago
  • spectral

    ahhaaa! you're back, and better than ever, lovely writing (but of course, that goes without saying) and congrats on the well-deserved 100!


    4 months ago
  • inanutshell

    im terribly late to this but you're back!!! so excited, this is so incredibly gorgeous ahhhhh!! always love your writing and have truly missed it so much :") congrats on 100, you deserve every single one of them <3


    4 months ago
  • kealoha

    CONGRATS! You totally deserve it, every one of your pieces are absolutely gorgeous!


    4 months ago
  • chrysanthemums&ink

    SDAFLKSDHAKJHFD to repeat what everyone else has said, FRESH MEAT HUEHUEHUE (see: jin's windshield wiper laugh). but my army heart was very much quaking during this entire poem and *wipes tear* it's so fricking good i-
    congrats on 100 bc you definitely deserve all of those followers for your splendid work!
    *btw which is better, orch version of black swan (i swear, we need an instrumental-) or trap? orch for me ofc ;) ;)


    4 months ago
  • jun lei

    holy shit i really did say i was going to follow you and forgot to, didn't i--


    4 months ago
  • jun lei

    this! is! gorgeous! i adore how you incorporated the lyrics, yet didn't rely on them, making the poem beautiful in its own right. your vocabulary isn't simply sophisticated, it's achingly beautiful, the way you spin words. you deserve the 100, and thousands more.
    i also realized that i'm not following you, a mistake that must be corrected. can't stand to miss any of your gorgeous writing.
    again, congratulations! you deserve it.


    4 months ago
  • Dmoral

    FRESH MEAT DID IT AAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
    *chuckles softly*
    i knew you could do it, ;), your work is breathtaking & powerful & so unqiue


    4 months ago
  • elliem

    Reply: Thank you so much! And congrats to you too!! :) (Also I realized I'm not following you yet which was a total fluke I'm so sorry...) Have a wonderful day.


    4 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    OH HEY WELCOME BACK!! I'm glad to see ya. Great piece btw. And oh idk CONGRATS.


    4 months ago
  • naomi ling

    y'all DOIN TOO MUCH HAHAHA


    4 months ago
  • sunny.v

    ASDKNJCSLKCW RILEY REMINDED ME!! HEY EVERYBODY LOOK IT'S THE FRESH MEAT


    4 months ago
  • poetri

    yeet skeet look guys its the fresh meat
    (yayy you're back i missed youuuuu also congrats!! you deserve every follower and more, dear)


    4 months ago
  • sunny.v

    and omg omg congrats on 100 my dear! you absolutely deserve it the mostest--yyour talent is impeccable and you've been one of my closest friends and a genuine light of my day. here's to so many more! also thank you for letting me use you as a cameo character hahah love you so much naomiiii


    4 months ago
  • sunny.v

    NAOMI AAAAAAAAAA YOURE BACK!!! also yes girl black swan was awesomeeee


    4 months ago