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Believe me when I say that I loved every single line here. I didn't highlight them all because (a) that'd be kind of unreasonable and (b) I simply don't know enough synonyms of 'brilliant.' You've described love in an unconventional way that one doesn't get to see much and I absolutely adore that. Your writing is always deeply thought provoking and beautiful, and this piece is no exception. Yeah, I definitely don't have the hugest crush on your writing.
This piece feels 'complete' and I don't think that it needs any expansion, per se. But if you really want to expand on certain ideas here, you could talk more about the 'dying house.' I feel it could be expanded to include a beautiful image that would wonderfully suit the piece.
This is a beautiful piece and I'd love to read another draft if you write one. Do let me know if you have any questions! All the best with your writing :)
Also, I'm really sorry that the review is so late!