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I would like some tips on grammar and writing style.
I thought this constant confusion of names the Grandma had was interesting, and I really wanted to find out why and what happened with the situation.
The constant mistaking of names definitely brought an idea, how the Grandma seems to be living in the past and confusing reality with the past.
I'm confused with who everyone is. You spent most of the piece showing how the Grandma mixed up the protagonist's name, and only indicated that Jack may be the grandfather because of how she clutched the pearl bracelet. Who's Casey?
This is an interesting piece, and I like your idea. Keep up the work!
I think that it would be interesting if you added in more of what the protagonist felt like when he/she got mistaken so many times. If I were in the protagonist's place, I'd be pretty upset with how the Grandma only thinks of all these other people, and doesn't value my presence.