Below, you'll see any text that was highlighted with comments from the reviewer.
Message to Readers
Woohoo... managed to do it within 99 words!
The first two lines are super strong at pulling the reader in. It makes you want to learn more about what place the person is and who they are.
The end did this wonderfully. It indicates that the subject is some form of royalty. Maybe it’s a princess or the queen or a prince. It also alluded to him or her being in a city of some sort. My first thought was new york like in enchanted.
The line about the cars was a little confusing, but i understood it once i thought about it. the line about the sun was a bit to vague for me to understand what was being said.
I absolutely love the story you have here. The character really shines through and you were able to tell me so much. prompts like these are super difficult and you pulled it off amazingly.
please let me know if you decide to revise this piece i’d love to see how you improve it. also i think it would be super cool if you made this a mini series on your page. i’d love to hear more stories with this character and how it adjusts to the city life and/or its journey to find their way home.