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Message from Writer

So...I hope to be published some day, but I still have a long way to go.

Be sure to check out my series, The Girl Of Summer, C.R.U.S.H., agent files, Sea Shells And Glass Bottles. If you want me to notify you when a new chapter comes out please comment.

I liked the idea of a grab bag so here's mine:
January Grab Bag
#1: If you could live in any book world which would it be? Write a short story about your time there.
#2: A list of books you could read over and over again.
#3: What would it be like to switch bodies with your best friend? Short story
#4 A poem about two things that are opposite.
#5 Write about a weird experience you had once.
I would love to see what you write.
Don't be afraid to ask for a review. :)

Longing

August 6, 2020

The bear cub climbs higher, hoping to be able to spot his mother from here. Not daring to make a sound. He had been chased this far, and his mother farther in the opposite direction. Then fear, and anxiety over came him, and he let out a holler for help. The help never came, just a bullet to his heart. 

Dead.
 
Killed by what had caused him to long...

                           ...to long for his mother.
word count 74

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17 Comments
  • Deleted User

    This is CRAZY good and heart breaking. Excellent job!!!


    about 1 year ago
  • dovetrees

    oh my, the ending! really hit me in the heart. amazing piece!


    about 1 year ago
  • RemovedUser1

    Wow. This is so sad! Oh, just, really emotional. Great job!


    about 1 year ago
  • FantasyOtter12

    Wrote a review- amazing piece!!


    about 1 year ago
  • Jo Rejoicing [ChildOfGod]

    I wrote a review. Hope you get it soon!


    about 1 year ago
  • Lata.B

    Awwwww this broke my heart! :(


    about 1 year ago
  • Huba Huba

    Gotta say, I came this way because I saw all the likes, and now I see the reason why there's so many likes.


    about 1 year ago
  • Ren(hiatus)

    Awww, this is so sad. The poor cub, well at least he got to meet his mother again. Anyways great job, this is really heart breaking and shows the cruelty of humans.


    about 1 year ago
  • Mia2004

    I cried... It is so depressing, and i don't really like animals :(((
    Your an amazing writer


    about 1 year ago
  • Deleted User

    This is so beautiful yet sad and emotional! :'(
    When you can make people want to cry in 74 words.... You should get a medal!


    about 1 year ago
  • Rohan’s Defender (Semi-Active)

    Wow... so sad! I wanted to cry! Good job with the emotion!


    about 1 year ago
  • sci-Fi

    Replying: Hi, sorry I didn't notify u but I've already done my part of the chain. Here's the link:
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/181568/version/365270


    about 1 year ago
  • Jasmin khawar

    Review will be submitted soon :)


    about 1 year ago
  • Landofstories

    also peer review coming through!


    about 1 year ago
  • Landofstories

    nooooooo i have tears in my eyes now :( great piece


    about 1 year ago
  • Jasmin khawar

    TT this is touching!! Just Wow.....


    about 1 year ago
  • Cici'sTimes

    Wow... this is so sad. I love the last part with the stuttering. Awesome piece, with the setting and emotion.


    about 1 year ago