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Message to Readers
Please share any suggestions or improvements I can make to make this story more clear! How can I change things so the "golden orb" is more clearly represented as hope? How can I make it so the reader more easily understands what is happening?
Please let me know your overall thoughts!
I love how descriptive it is, all the metaphors, symbolism, everything!
You used symbolism well, and this is a very good quality in your writing!
I understand that you're trying to make this story have many interpretations, but as a story, I think that it slightly lacks solid events. At first, I thought that everything was just a description of the weather outside the windows of the hospital, until when I read your 'message to the reader' I realized it was portraying what the protagonist felt.
You have lots of skill and potential as a writer, and I believe that you have a good chance of winning this competition!