"half of me is ocean. half of me is sky."
Final draft! Thanks for the peer reviews! :)
Written By: And_The_Stars_Laughed
August 17, 2020
PROMPT: Flash Fiction Competition 2020
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Ahh! This is beautiful!! It’s practically perfect! I love it so much, and I like the line you added, “ strokes her now-flat stomach and withers away.” That was perfect and added a nice detail! (I’m secretly really happy that you used some off my suggestions XD)
Ah really wonderful piece, as always! The way you've hinted at what's happening without explicitly stating works really well. The narrative voice here is also really good. It's been an absolute pleasure working with you too, and I'm so glad for having got the opportunity as well :)
Oh ok lol Ty ^^
Replying: Oh yes thank you! Oh wait when did it or will it end?
Wow. This is really amazing! It's emotional, impactful and conveys the message in a lovely subtle way. Well done, and good luck!
this is such a stunning, emotional, flash fiction piece that really hits hard and doesn't let go until the end. Superb job! I don't think anything was too confusing here, I got the reference to death: the line "strokes her now flat-stomach" conveys everything, so nice job there; and I think the euphemism of "Early" works perfectly.
And of course that ending line is *chef's kiss*
such a tragic topic but you executed it well :D
Bhavya's Treasure (Bewitching Tombstone #Queenie's Halloween)
Oh Wow! It took me two reads to figure out what's happening... But when it hit, it rendered me speechless!!!
"Got the girl, too. " Who's this girl?
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