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I really liked your style of writing. It's very descriptive and pretty.
You definitely did this well, using your indirect yet descriptive language.
There could be more emphasis on how the 'Summer Cycle' broke. Instead of using so many words just to describe the weather (although I really liked how you did this, but sadly there's a 99 word limit), you could put more of that descriptive language into how it broke.
Your style of writing is very beautiful, and I think that you have a good chance of winning the competition!
Also, if you find it difficult to omit your seasonal descriptions, you could try starting with omitting the first two sentences. Perhaps something like, "we only meet every summer, otherwise we're apart." Remember, there doesn't need to be so many specifications!