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I love the fact that the main character is a female who is an officer in a concentration camp. this is a very rare occurrence because only about 5% of officers were female in the world war. Faith's bravery and love for her friend was exemplary, and also reminds me of the Hunger Games, which I loved reading.
It would be great if you could add some more emotion into your writing, for example when Maya was being tied up, was she at rest and calm or was she resisting? Also, if you could expand on the details of the surrounding and set the scene better, I think that your story would create a sense of impending doom, and make your story quite gripping. Be sure to explain and describe your surroundings, for example the weather, and how the characters felt to give your story more depth. Improving the paragraphing would make your piece more enticing to the reader. Writing your whole story in one whole paragraph might seem monotonous or difficult to read at a glance.
Overall, I think you've written quite a masterpiece. I loved the plot. Keep on improving, and definitely keep up the great work! :)