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What drew me into this letter and made me interested was the overall theme of it; that life is complicated, but we have to talk about it and not be afraid. We often keep the things we face to ourselves and we often feel that life's like a "half-finished rubik's cube." However, by passing on the rubik's cube, other people can help us solve it and we often feel less alone. Nice work.
Perhaps you could expand upon the writer's own and other people's struggles in life, such as breakups or failures like losing a job. While you do acknowledge that human beings do face these things, you don't go into a lot of detail into it. By doing so, you'd be able to add just a bit more depth to your piece. However, this is merely a suggestion and you do not have to take it.
1. What inspired you to write this piece? Was this based on a personal experience? A philosophical idea? Or was this just a random idea entirely?
2. What would you say was your favorite aspect of this piece? The philosophical part or the metaphors you placed into it?
3. What were you feeling when you finished this piece? Happy? Proud? Empowered? Creative? Do tell.
To keep on polishing up this piece and make more like it. We often bottle our feelings away in this modern day and this is precisely the kind of thing people need. It's a brilliant piece!
Hello The Dreamer, it's your friendly neighborhood Senior Peer Reviewer and I very much enjoyed reviewing this piece. It was deeply philosophical for a letter and honestly one of the best I've seen. While there are some things in need of improvement, it's still a really great piece. I fully encourage you to write more like it. Have a wonderful day!