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First off, your imagery was absolutely incredible!! Throughout this entire piece, I felt as if was surrounded by the beautiful landscape that you describe. Your use of language (verbs/adjectives/nouns) is so well-thought out and created such a graceful and alluring tone. In a way, this piece seems as if it could be a folk-tale passed on through generations, something that you might hear before you go to bed at night, something that evokes sweet, peaceful dreams. My favorite line was probably the last one: "for one day, he will meet the maker of his dreams." The reason I loved this line so much was because it left me utterly speechless -- it closed out the piece perfectly yet left me wanting to know more about the "moon boy." Awesome work!!
If you were to expand this piece, or continue writing it, perhaps you consider thinking about what impact it might create on your piece if you wrote in more details about the "moonboy" himself. He's sort of this mysterious yet fascinating character, and so what I'm wondering is how he came to be, how he came to exist? Is he simply a metaphor, a figment of a child's imagination, does he show up in somebody's dream, or is he, in fact, a "concrete" entity? How do you think it might affect this piece if you were to add/expand on the "moonboy?" However, feel no need to consider this thought/suggestion, it's just something that came to my mind. :)
Overall, this was a really fun piece to read and review, your imagery is spectacular!! Amazing job!!
If you have any questions about this review, feel free to let me know, and it the meantime, keep writing! :)