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unedited 12am shmazz
This is such a wonderful piece! The imagery as well as diction here is gorgeous.
This piece could be expanded. The concept you have here is really good and the gorgeous imagery you've used complements it very well! I also think that your use of italics in this piece seems rather random. Italics definitely add to a piece when used well, but their usage seems somewhat arbitrary and casual, rather than deliberate.
This is a beautiful piece and I enjoyed reviewing it. Do let me know if you have any questions! All the best with your writing :)