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I feel that the semicolons are there to differentiate the different pieces of the queen character. They provide just a brief break from the last bit of information to the next, making each one that much more important to the sentence as a whole.
The only thing I can think of to revise is the ending. While it's cool that it matches the beginning, the whole piece feels like it's building up, and then the ending slows it down again just a little bit. Otherwise it was fantastic!
I like how every clause has a word that begins with the letter "s". It ties everything together in a subtle way, and adds a little more of a poetic element. Altogether, this was super super good!