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This piece interested me because the writer used such simple and honest language to express many complex emotions and circumstances.
I think the writer already does a great job conveying the characters of the mother especially, but also the hairdresser and author. I think the writer could write a bit more about the hairdresser, since the letter is addressed to Rocío, but the way it is now is really great.
What made you choose to write about your mother and the role of a hairdresser?
Do you think your mother can change her mindset about beauty? Do you think she should?
I really like how this letter is almost an observation. You look at people others wouldn't think twice about, and really notice their complexities and problems. A lot of writing is observing what others don't see, and I think you definitely did that with this beautiful piece!
Good luck in the competition! I hope my comments help, and I hope you do well. Thank you for sharing your work - I truly enjoyed reading it closely.