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Feedback of any kind very much appreciated!
I really liked the intense, vivid imagery in this piece, as well as the overall feeling of mysteriousness throughout it. I loved your descriptions of Kali's encounter with the fortune teller - the adjectives and images you chose to portray made me feel like I was sitting next to Kali! The long title of the piece also grabbed my attention. It hints at what has happened to Kali, and foreshadows what may lay in her future, which I find absolutely awesome.
I was able to infer that Kali might have had a past with Baran, that broke her and led her to visit the fortuneteller quite easily. I don't think any additional details are necessary - it's always great to be somewhat mysterious in the beginning of stories, and slowly unfurl the details as you grab readers' attention. If you're planning to write Part 2, I can't wait to read it!
Keep up the awesome writing! :3