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I absolutely love how you switched up the rhythm of this piece multiple times, I thought it worked quite well!! I enjoyed how, in the beginning, it had more of a free-verse poetry tone/feel to it (in that the lines followed one-after-the-other), but then, it shifted, making it sound more like a rap. I think you did a wonderful job connecting the piece from the beginning to the end as well, really bringing it full-circle in a sense. I like how, in the opening stanza, you said "and i'm left mid sentence on a thought i've failed to finish," and then again, at the end, you said: "and i'm still sitting mid sentence having gone around the globe." I also really enjoyed, how, in some stanzas, you didn't use much punctuation (if any), for I think that it contributed to the "rap" tone and the sort of chaotic but composed state carries through. Awesome job!
Perhaps you could think about how it might impact your piece if you considered formatting it in a way that followed more of a pattern? I love how you shift from a more poetic feel to more of a rap, but maybe you could consider lining this up differently, per se. I noticed that in the first "half" of this piece you simply formatted the first stanza in a typical free-verse poetry way, then you used dashes to break it up, and then you shifted to not using much punctuation at all. How do you think it might affect your piece if you considered doing the same to the second "half" of the piece. However, feel no need to take this suggestion, its just a thought that came to me. :)
Overall, this was a really fun piece to read and review, I love the rhythm to it -- I enjoyed it thoroughly!!! If you have any questions about this review, feel free to let me know, I'd be happy to help! In the meantime, keep writing!! :)