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This is a short skit I wrote. I think that it is a bit of a comedy, though I tried to base it off of the parable Jesus told in Matthew 7:24-27. I hope you enjoy it! And keep that positive feedback coming in!
The names of the characters and the dialogue are really clever and well-written! I laughed a lot while reading the skit. I love the way the names of the characters reflect their personalities and actions (i.e. Mrs. Money-Bags for the rich lady building her mansion, Stormy Jane for the weather lady).
I don't think a considerable amount of detail is necessary, as this is a short skit, after all. However, I think the transition from the storm to Mrs. Money-Bags' house washing away is a bit abrupt. You don't have to follow my suggestion exactly, but I think you could describe the storm and foreshadow the house sinking into the ocean in a humorous way, before transitioning to Darrell Stephens' interview of Mrs. Money-Bags. Also, some italics regarding the actions of the characters in parentheses could help make the script a bit clearer to read. Other than that, I really loved this skit--it's hilarious and leaves a lesson for the readers!
Keep up the great work! :3