doodleninja

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~your local angst-y Christian girl~

ARMY <3

soli Deo gloria!

Message from Writer

>call me "doodle" :)

>check out my series "stereo tropes co." where story tropes run amuck in an office setting!

~"you write so beautifully. your mind must be a terrible place."~
always on the lookout for tragic backstories and broken characters. :D

#dramatize CONTEST RESULTS!!! *cue the celebration*

July 2, 2020

FREE WRITING

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First off, THANK YOU SO MUCH FROM THE BOTTOM OF MY HEART for all you who entered! For my first contest, I'd say this was a complete success! 
So yay! *throws roses and confetti at the wonderful writers*

ALSO! Thanks to everyone who helped me reach 102 FOLLOWERS! And in only, like, two-and-a-half months! That's insane! You all have been super supportive of my writing and also have given me some great pointers and feedback as well!

I want to do something in celebration for this milestone, but I'm not sure what. So comment any ideas :)

BUT WITHOUT FURTHER ADO.
THE WINNERS...*dramatic music*

FOR PROMPT 1:

3rd Place: Emi's The Ice Cream Horde
I never thought being an ice-cream girl could be such a dramatic experience. But Emi, you have opened my eyes!! Definitely took a mundane event and turned it into something extraordinary. I loved the use of "battle"-related language to bring across the image of being at war and how you called the customers "the enemies" XD 
Also the spot-on use of Shakespearean language. That cracked me up. 
One of my fave lines:
 "Who art thou?" I nearly wailed as the girls began to take charge, like rescuing angels. 
    "Hark, we heard thy call on thy communication device, and came to help with thine ice cream orders," they replied.


2nd Place: Best at procrastinating's For the French Fries
Your creativity was through the roof on this and I had so much fun reading this. You turned getting a condiment into a big Indiana Jones-worthy adventure! Nice use of vocab, and dramatic short sentences to convey this sense of urgency. 
One of my fave lines: 
Suddenly, decisively, I lunged forward. I grabbed the handle to the object. Echoes of my doubts snaked into my mind. You can’t do this. You’re no match for the dreaded Refrigerator.

1st Place: Eblinn's Guardian angels never show their face
The DRAMA IS REAL! What set this piece apart was how you nailed this prompt on the head with your appropriate grandiose language, quick bits of humor and wait, and the narrator being extra as HECK. 
And I loved how you never stated outright that it was a dentist appointment, but included all these clever, subtle hints to it. It was perfect. 
One of my fave lines:
My lips are as dry as the conversations my dad pursues via text (“Look dad, I took a picture of a beautiful sunset the other day!” “Ok. When home?”)

And a quick lightning round of honorable mentions:
Ellen J's Matutine- waking up has never been so fascinating and murderous :D
Ollie Octopus' How I write a piece for a contest- loved the banter between "me" and "inner brain" XD
outoftheblue's Searing, emanating, slowly deteriorating - beautiful, fanciful language
Cata Londo's KEEPING UP THE ACT- unique spin on lying


And now.
FOR PROMPT 2!!



3rd Place: BizzleWrites' Daisy-Chains and Dead Roses 
In just a short paragraph of text, you tell us a tragic tale that broke my heart a bit at the end. I loved how the story was woven into the girl reminiscing about her dead friend and how we got some really intriguing character depth, ranging from sorrow to even some survivor's guilt. 
Again, I'm blown away at how much story you could capture in such a short piece! Well done!
One of my fave lines:
So here I sit, singing to the dead girl, who's life was taken by Death, and feeling the regretable sting of guilt that she didn't take me instead.

2nd Place: Emi's Daughter of Society
The storytelling in this through monologue is perfect. How you format the piece with "I am" and "I am not" and simultaneously convey Victoria's character throughout, how she's not your typical daughter of society, works superbly well. 
Also it had a very satisfying ending that left me with happy feels (something I am not accustomed to XD)
One of my fave lines:
I am not the daughter to clobber Ellsworth Rutter over the head with the butt of a rifle when he nearly finds me hiding under a bush.
...
I lied. I am.


1st Place: 2am Ghost's I burned down the chemistry lab again and I'm sorry
Compelling and hilarious and just my cup of tea, this piece brings the dramatic in dramatic monologue. How the narrator told their story had me laughing so hard at times and their personality really shines through, which is what earned this piece its first place. I can just imagine their gestures while telling this unfortunate tale. Amazing work!
One of my fave lines:
 Only one kid had to be admitted the hospital, and he was completely fine. I mean, at least I think so. If anything, my classmates should've been thanking me since I caused school to shut down for the rest of the week. You're welcome.  

'Nother quick lightning round of honorable mentions:
The Moving Finger Writes' A Letter For the End of the Universe- chilling yet peaceful
MimiChoudhury's My hands would never be clean again- love a good Lady Macbeth allusion
SunV's Ode to the Deaths on May 2nd 1998- super nice weaving in how all the characters died/were affected

A review of the PRIZES:
  • 1st Place gets a peer review on THREE (3) pieces of their choice, a comment on TEN (10) pieces of my choice, PLUS they get to choose the topic of my next piece about Stereo Tropes Co. (aka the next trope I poke some fun at; if you're unaware of that series, check out the footnotes)
  • 2nd Place gets a peer review on TWO (2) pieces of their choice, and a comment on FIVE (5) pieces of my choice
  • 3rd Place gets a peer review on ONE (1) piece of their choice and a comment on THREE (3) pieces of my choice
So winners, comment links/titles of pieces you want me to review.
And Eblinn and 2am Ghost, comment what kind of trope you'd like the next Stereo Tropes Co. story to be about!

Once again, THANKS SO MUCH for entering. And thanks again for 102 followers! Here's to more great writing and I hope you ALL have a splendiferous day!
 

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  • journal.scribbles

    Thank you so much for waiting! Here are pieces to review if you get a chance to:
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/178907/version/357420
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/177412/version/353558


    10 months ago
  • 2am Ghost

    Hey! This is x10 late, but um... if you could review these I’d really appreciate it! https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/178698/version/356905
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/178703/version/356917
    And if it’s ok, I don’t mind if you only review these two pieces instead of the three. I’m totally cool with it. :)


    10 months ago
  • Eblinn

    so a trope... You know how in high school movies there is always the shy, 'nerdy' girl who gets a make-over and ends up becoming the pretty girl every boy wants? Maybe you could write something about that :)


    10 months ago
  • 2am Ghost

    0_0 Waaaaahhhh I won.....? Thank you so much! For the reviews, I, uh, don’t exactly have any pieces you could review at the moment, (Oops :’D) so I’ll come back soon to let you know when I do. (If that’s fine) And as for the trope, I don’t really know what the name for it is, so I’ll explain: It’s pretty much when the main character needs to diffuse a bomb or something else, and even though it says 10 seconds left or something, they have a whole conversation with the villain, manage to convince them to be good, and then make a freaking sandwich or something before diffusing it in the last seconds- if ya know what I mean. :)


    10 months ago
  • SunV

    Congratulations to all the winners! And thank you for hosting this competition!


    10 months ago
  • BizzleWrites

    Can this be the piece that you pare review for me, if you don't mind: https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/177098/version/353232


    10 months ago
  • Eblinn

    Wow, what??? I'm so honoured, thank you so much! It was such a fun challenge :)
    Congrats on 102 followers !
    It'd be great if you could review these pieces:
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/176111/version/351319
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/175425/version/348871
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/174887/version/352154
    I'll come up with a trope in a sec, have a splendiferous day too!


    10 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Congratulations to everyone!!


    10 months ago
  • The Moving Finger Writes

    Congratulations to all the winners! :)


    10 months ago
  • Cata Londo

    Congratulations to everyone!!


    10 months ago
  • journal.scribbles

    Wow, thank you!!! Your prompts were super inspiring. Thanks for hosting the contest! I'm working on a piece right now that I'd really appreciate a review on, so if it's okay with you, I'll comment the links when I publish it. Also, yay! More Stero Tropes Co.! Can't wait to read them.


    10 months ago
  • Deleted User

    Congrats to everyone! Also, congrats on 100+ followers:)


    10 months ago
  • Emi

    Thank you so much! This was a lot of fun participating in this contest!
    Piece to review:
    "The Fire"
    https://www.writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/176787/version/352101
    "The Blue Hyacinth"
    https://www.writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/176511/version/351516
    "Waves of Childhood"
    https://www.writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/176509/version/351509


    10 months ago
  • outoftheblue

    congrats to the winners and to you for 102 followers!
    (also, i'm hella excited for more stereo tropes content!!!!!!!)


    10 months ago