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I loved this piece! The title tells a whole story in itself and you captured the idea of wanting to hold onto someone who is already gone so, so well. And I don’t even think that I have to tell you that the descriptions are AMAZING!! Like, every single one! The whole first paragraph is pure gold. I appreciate the way that you engaged multiple senses to give a very complete picture of the way that this person makes the narrator feel.
I’m curious as to what actually happened to this person. Did they die or was it a breakup? If they did die, then maybe you could somehow subtly emphasise this a little more, as that could be powerful. Maybe you could add something like ‘even if it will not bring you back’ to the end, to end on a darker note and emphasise the lasting heartbreak? Just an idea :)
I am in awe of this piece. Wow - you are an incredibly talented writer.