Below, you'll see any text that was highlighted with comments from the reviewer.
Tap on comment to view. Using a mouse?
Hover over comments to view. On a touch device?
Peer Review
I loved the writers ability to write something so specific to one persons personal journey in dealing with loss but in a way that it relates to the audience so clearly. I loved the cleverness in word choice throughout the piece. "i'll glue your fragrance on my wrists," it is so much more powerful then saying something like, "i wanted your scent to stay with me" (sorry that my example I just gave is so bad but yours was too good to make one anywhere near as powerful). The part about sewing to keep their image alive is so moving.
I'd like it if there was more elaboration on the process from trying to hold on to them to trying to forget them altogether. For example, you added, "i tried to forget you/to make it easier". I would have liked a few lines maybe showing in your own way what made holding on so hard, but regardless I loved this piece so much!
Reviewer Comments
I thought this was very well thought out and precise, and I cant wait to see what else your writing has in store.