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the all consuming

June 26, 2020

PROMPT: The Unseen

great suffocation pushing down on me.
he makes his presence known;
climbing onto my shoulders.
tethering himself to each of my thoughts.
building a space around me called, "Past".
he plays me movies at the 11th hour each night,
he feeds off these.

the could have been.
the emptiness of the present.
the fury of the past.
the uncharted of the future. 
a series of unfulfilled hopes and desires.

the fabricated dreams.
absolute euphoria congesting my days,
tranquility casting its shadow upon my soul, 
reality parallel to those seen on the silver screen,
has my shortage of hope and exhilaration distorted my reverie?
could it not be so bad, this situation I have?  


I added the third stanza after reading some peer reviews, thank you! I would love to hear what you think of it. I was trying to get the point across that it is an endless cycle by adding the second, "regret" at the end. 


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  • BlueWolf

    Thanks for your review!!! This is an amazing piece. It is utterly captivating and makes me think about how regret is always present. It is amazing and just wow!!! Love the title!!!

    3 months ago
  • happy butterfly

    Hey, thanks so much for the review! Your kind words mean alot.Also I'm kind of on a 'journey ' of improving my writing. So your words really encouraged me,thank you!;

    5 months ago