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ummm, anatomy lesson for the day? XD idk what this is
This was a really nice piece! You managed to capture the wonder of our bodies (and life itself) very well, in a way that I don’t often see. It was very simple, yet evocative.
I think that you could make this piece and the descriptions even better by adding some more figurative language (metaphors and similes). At the moment, this piece is very literal and it also mainly describes the physical aspects of humans. I really liked it when you delved a bit deeper in the part about our soul, and maybe you could mention or hearts, minds, souls or emotions a bit more? Just a few suggestions :)
This is a very unique and great piece! I love how you used this format to explore the simple beauty of just living - it’s a really positive and under-explored topic and I congratulate you for tackling it so effortlessly. I really enjoyed reading this :)