kealoha

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Message to Readers

ummm, anatomy lesson for the day? XD idk what this is

being

June 27, 2020

FREE WRITING

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oxygen tumbling through wind pipes and into hollow lungs / red blood cycling through a never-ending circuit / muscle beating against ribs vigorously / nerves screaming at the slightest sensation / bones supporting fragile structure / stomach consuming tirelessly / arteries tenderly cradling life in the form of color / skin stretching and pulling to keep everything contained / tongue performing acrobatics to produce sounds / eyes perceiving beauty and criticizing it / teeth shining to represent joy / hair twisting and winding whichever way fingers guide it / soul sparkling and dancing.

to exist is really indescribable.  
i'm not sure what this is, but i love describing things so this style is working out great for me.  lowercase intentional.  feedback appreciated, as always :)

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7 Comments

  • Jo Margaux

    Love this! Especially hat last line!


    7 months ago

  • rainandsonder

    ah your descriptions are gorgeous! i especially love the line about oxygen tumbling through wind pipes.


    8 months ago

  • Dmoral

    that opENING tho, aaaaaaaaAAAAAAAAAHAHAHAHAHAH


    8 months ago

  • naomi ling

    awhh this is so beautiful and a perfect way of describing the human body. thank you also for your kind words; i look forward to bumping into you again around WTW soon <33


    8 months ago

  • ~wildflower~

    Hi! To celebrate 50 followers, I did a raffle style thing to choose three of my followers to award with 2 reviews of their choice. You were one of the winners! Check it out here - https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/175935/version/350123 - and comment with which pieces you would like me to review :)


    8 months ago

  • books4life

    Whoa! I like this. The human body is so intricate and fascinating, to me at least, and I love your creative take on it. :)


    8 months ago

  • Eblinn

    ooh I like this! our human bodies are so intricate and there is a wonder about being alive


    8 months ago