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You totally set me up to cry! Their love for each other was beautiful, which made the ending even more of a tear-jerker.
It seems like Pat's whole life was Mia. While that is pretty romantic, I would've liked to know more personal things about Pat, like his age, his job, his hobbies, his looks, etc.
Feel free to accept or reject my suggestions :) Nice job!